May 31, 2010

Love, *Conditions Apply!

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Love - A 55 Fiction


Love, *Conditions Apply!


“I love you darling, but…” It disturbed Ravi, the ‘but’. Two years ago, he had left everything for his love. The same love was betraying him today. The end had neared. After having fought against the society for so long, Amey’s sorrowful words pierced through Ravi’s heart, “…I have to go back to my wife!”




P.S.:  See what other "Rodeo Writers" have written for the contest: Nethra, Anney, Mahesh, Swathi, Pranjal, Arjit and Anurag

36 comments:

Praveen said...

Nice as always, You have perfect blend of humour, sarcasm and Truth.

Nethra said...

I already told you it's awesome, didn't i? The suspense was shockingly humorous.
All the best to us, the rodeo writers! Hope, we win! :)

Dhiman said...

U created real suspense with 'but' in 55-words :)
All the Best!

Vij@ソ said...

Hey awesome write up. You are writing really well.

Keep Blogging

pal said...

excellent.. loved the twist!

Neha said...

oh nice nice..sad and funny at the same time..good luck :)

PNA said...

First the but... and then the twist, :D:D a wholesome package of a 55er, good luck Pooja :)

Saurabh Panshikar said...

That was totally unexpected! Going on and sharing this with friends...

Yemiledu said...

Hey a nice one.
Came here through Saurabh's tweet :)

Yemiledu said...

Hey a nice one :)

Harini said...

Sad and good :).

Advaita said...

hehehehehe.......

Sree said...

Terrific! :)
All the best! :)

Tavish Chadha(sensible-bakwas.com) said...

lol... that was one hell of a 55er... at first in thought its the usual clichéd stuff and then when I read the last line, I was like wow! amazing...

keep them coming!

Cheers!
Tavish

VK said...

Pooja,

Truly amazing tiny story. Didn't expect that last line '“…I have to go back to my wife!” Absolute shocker of a climax.

All the best to your team for BPL.

Cheers!

Vamshi

HaRy!! said...

real gud one.... 55ers are always the best way to finish the message! followin yu :) and addin yu up

vEnKy said...

I have a friend called Ravi I wonder How he would react! :-)

evanescentthoughts said...

Hehe.. go back to "wife".. Amazing twist at the end. Loved it

Pooja Menon said...

@Praveen Thanks a lot for the encouragement! :)

Pooja Menon said...

@Nethra - Thanks a ton sweety. Yes, we will win it! M positive enough! :)

Pooja Menon said...

@Dhiman - Yes, the 'but' was meant to create suspense! :P Thanks ton! :)

Pooja Menon said...

@Vijay - Thanks a lot! :)

Pooja Menon said...

@pal - Thanks a ton! :)

@neha - Thanks dear! :)

Pooja Menon said...

@PNA - That meant a lot! Thanks a lot for dropping by! :)

Pooja Menon said...

@Saurabh - Thanks a lot man! :)

Pooja Menon said...

@Yemiledu - Thanks for dropping by :0 And thank Saurabh too for sharing this! :)

@Harini - Thanks a lot dear! :)

Pooja Menon said...

@Advaita - :P

@Sree - Thanks a ton for dropping by and for the comment! :)

Pooja Menon said...

@Tavish - Thanks a ton! That meant a lot! Liked your poem too! All the best to you! :)

Pooja Menon said...

@VK - Thanks a lot ya! I am happy the suspense was liked! :)

@Hary - Thanks a lot for the comment and for following :)

Pooja Menon said...

@Venky - Haha.. *all characters were fictitious and any resemblance to any person living or dead was purely co-incidental* :P Thanks for dropping by! :)

Pooja Menon said...

@evanescentthoughts - Thanks a ton! M glad you liked the suspense! :)

Sourav C. Pandey said...

You have this capability to breathe in life to your 55ers, but you know I'd still say the lesser words you use, the more beautifully expressive you are!

"…I have to go back to my wife!"

Pointed out a line in your last 55er too, I guess you should try a 5-10er sometime.
Loved the post, though it's so GAY! :P

Keep writing! :)

Hidden...in love with me and life! :)

Pooja Menon said...

Thanks a ton Sourav! And thank you so much for the encouragement! Even you should try a 55er some day :)

Tuppence said...

Am not so much a 55 fiction person . But this was cute and suspense filled ..
Like your writing . Will sure Come bck to read more of your stuff

deepa kashyap said...

nice post !!
loved it :) :)

Shrinidhi Hande said...

nice.