May 17, 2010

The Last Touch

55 Fiction. It is a form of micro-fiction that refers to the works of fiction limited to  maximum of fifty-five words. This is my third and hope to better myself each time I write one.. Read on..

The Last Touch
She kissed his palm. He felt the hot tears on her cheeks. They kissed each other. She saw his haggard face; and remembered it was time. Sobbing, she closed her eyes; placed her hand on his chest. The heart which lived for her was not beating anymore. She kissed his forehead for the last time.

P.S.: I was inspired to write on a theme based on love after I helped a friend with a post yesterday. Love has a very deep meaning. Love derives more meaning and becomes stronger once the one who loved you, leaves you due to NO fault of either of the two people in Love.

The second inspiration was this song, 'Unchained Melody' by Airsupply. The guy, in the story, had died earlier and had got some powers due to which he came back to earth, and the girl could ONLY feel him but NOT see him, even after his death. He finally had to leave the earth forever and that was when the song was picturised. Listen to it, and I bet, you will shed a tear or two..

18 comments:

Sourav C. Pandey said...

Felt the "last touch"!

"The heart which lived for her was not beating anymore." .. said it all, I think you said it all with these 10 words, you really expressed well!

PS: You didn't help the friend, you wrote it with him! Keep expressing, you are being felt by your words! :)

Take care!

Mahesh Kalaal said...

seems like both are soul-mates where love personifies beyond words and the pain of parting pricks the heart to pour incessant emotions

Vibushan L Narayan said...

good one.. quite a sad ending :) and i guess thats the beauty of it. Like I said, your 55 fictions are pretty good :)

vEnKy said...

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Pooja Menon said...

@Sourav.. Thanks a lot for the encouragement! :)

@Mahesh.. yes.. thanks for dropping by! :)

Pooja Menon said...

@Vibushan.. thanks a lot! 55 fiction is a beautiful concept.. try it for sure! :)

@vEnKy.. lol.. thanks a lot.. :)
try this link.. http://btemplates.com/blogger-templates/magazine/

Lunatic said...

Nice one, but you can try to include more content in the same length.
As said above, ten words were enough for this one.

vamsi said...

Good post there..I bet love is everywhere these days to u..On ur facebook wall, twitter page, etc...:P bwahaha..just kidding..:P anyways good post..PS was great..:)

Pooja Menon said...

@Lunatic.. Thanks for the comment. I know I wasn't able to do full justice to this 55F of mine. All that made an impact was that one line. Thanks for the suggestion. :)

@vamsi.. Yeah yeah. :P

Yes, LOVE is a great feeling. All of you people actually liked the PS more than the post! Strange! :D

Vij@ソ said...

A nice post and you have got one more follower .

Keep Blogging
:)

Pooja Menon said...

@Vijay.. Thanks a ton! For the comment and for following! :)

Nethra said...

I hate love stories with sad endings but they always make an impact. They always get me emotional.

- The Virgin Author! said...

Well written, Pooja. Fiction 55 is actually a nice thought concept, and if used effectively leaves a brilliant impact on the mind of the reader!

PS: I, for once, want to try writing a Fiction 55. Any suggestion?

Romeo Das said...

Nice post. Though it had a sad ending, I really loved reading it :)

And yes, the song is really touching!

Vintage Obsession said...

ok my first time here v, i haven't read your previous posts yet , and i loved this so write so freaking well yes touchy indeed :)

Pooja Menon said...

@Nethra. Yes, same here :) Thanks for the comment.

@Arijit. Yes, 55F is an amazing concept. I would suggest you to think of topics that generate suspense and remain a suspense till the end. Let the readers decipher what they want of it. I have not been able to do that till now. :)

Pooja Menon said...

@Romeo. Thanks for the comment Romeo. And thanks for liking it. :)

@Vintage Obsession. Thanks a lot for dropping by. And thanks a lot for liking my post. :)

Vishwesh Samant said...

This is awesome stuff. Cheers. :)