Mar 12, 2010

The Betrayal

55 Fiction. It is a form of micro-fiction that refers to the works of fiction limited to  maximum of fifty-five words. This is my second and hope to better myself each time I write one.. Read on..


The Betrayal
 Some men were leading her to an unknown place after having fed her well. They halted after some time and stroked her neck. She wondered, 'They take such good care of me! They seem God-like'. Suddenly she felt a deadly sting on her neck and collapsed in a pool of blood. She had been betrayed. 

16 comments:

vamsi said...

Short and nice..BTW wat is this 55 fiction?? Is it a contest??..I guess I saw it in an other post of yours too..:)

Pooja Menon said...

@ vamsi.. 55 Fiction is just a style of writing.. u have to limit yourself to 55 words.. the topic could be anything.. the story should have some characters & some preferably some moral or suspense towards the end.. thanks for the comment :)

Nethra said...

Hey the story didn't say much but it said a lot.
Nice one. :)

Ketan - www.ketansnadar.com said...

its a brutal murder...so never trust strangers...nice message..:)

Pooja Menon said...

@ Nethra.. Thanks a lot :)

@ Ketan.. It's about slaughtering of goats and other animals unnecessarily which is believed to pacify Gods..

Sorcerer said...

First time Here I guess. Came here via Yemiledu's blog.

:)

This is quiet a nice one.Liked it.
And the good old message of 'never trusting strangers.'
Nice work

buckingfastard said...

ahh...nice one!! well if they feed u for free...dere is a gud chance dey will betray u!!

freelancer said...

this one was good...real good

The Solitary Kid said...

Wow...I wasn't aware of microfiction until I read your post and googled it.

I'll make a mental note to try it out sometime!:D

Pooja Menon said...

@ buckingfastard.. thanks.. it dealt with slaughtering of goats and other animals.. :)

@ freelancer.. thanks a lot! :)

@ The Solitary Kid.. Yeah do try it! Helps flex your gray cells..

Anshul said...

Havn't heard abt 55 fiction before, but its is a very good concept. It brings out a real writer inside you. Must say you did a commendable job. Though the words were so less yet u were able to convey the meaning effectively.. I realized after reading that u r referring to slaughtering of goats. Hope to see some more good stuff from u.

Pooja Menon said...

@ Anshul.. Thanks a ton! Yeah 55 fiction is a good concept. Writing with a limitation really brings out the true writer in you!

ABC XYZ said...

d title led me to believe it was somthng else...it ws a good gesture frm u to wryt on dis topic...wel done

Pooja Menon said...

@ ^ .. yeah the topic did confuse some. thanks for your comment. :)

NesQuarX said...

You forgot the twitching for a minute after being hit part...

Pooja Menon said...

@NesQuarx.. Yeah.. Thanks for the feedback. :)